Comments on: 5 Ways to Write a Damn Good Sentence

By: Les Dossey

Les Dossey — Sat, 04 Jan 2014 12:35:08 +0000

Demian,

Brilliant! How to. Made Visible.

By: Shamir

Shamir — Mon, 30 Dec 2013 14:19:22 +0000

Now that you think about it, it’s crazy and awesome at the same time. It’s not really possible to focus on all of those factors while writing a copy, not for us anyways. Yet look at Ernest Hemingway and the likes, and you’ll see all of them qualities blended together in their copies. Awesome! Isn’t it?

By: Angelina

Angelina — Sat, 28 Dec 2013 10:14:30 +0000

Excellent writing! I love how you created a picture in my mind :-):-)

By: Demian Farnworth

Demian Farnworth — Fri, 13 Dec 2013 15:15:19 +0000

In reply to Rhandy.

Your copy should be written for your target audience — if that’s the investor, then you make your pitch to him. Your “about” page is to tell the visitor who you are what you do. And don’t forget about landings pages: https://copyblogger.com/landing-pages/

By: Rhandy

Rhandy — Thu, 12 Dec 2013 21:44:35 +0000

Hi, great article.

I’m creating a home page for a site. I want to grab the visitor’s attention from the first copy they’ll read on it, which will be the intro to the site’s purpose and benefit. I know to keep it short. My issue is that i’m going back and forth on which message to get across.

One copy will tell the visitor what we do and how they’ll use the site to their benefit.
The other copy is more like an elevator pitch to a potential investor where I tell him the formula of the site that makes it a win-win for the user, the site, the items being sold on the site, etc..

How do I know which one is the correct one(if any)?

By: Angelina

Angelina — Thu, 12 Dec 2013 06:57:00 +0000

Incredible tips …learnt alot from your article..so to see more good article soon

By: Jerod Morris

Jerod Morris — Sun, 08 Dec 2013 16:14:13 +0000

In reply to kartik Prashar. Either one could be right depending on the context, but #1 is going to be the more appropriate syntax most of the time. If you are talking to someone, and referencing people they work with, then #1 would be appropriate. Using the third person and then describing people as "colleagues" is far less common. It's grammatically correct, but the situations in which it would be used are rare.

By: kartik Prashar

kartik Prashar — Sun, 08 Dec 2013 14:12:23 +0000

i need sme help ppl…
which of the two sentence is right….
1. Which of your two colleagues is here?
or
2. Which of the two colleagues is here?

By: Demian Farnworth

Demian Farnworth — Wed, 04 Dec 2013 23:58:29 +0000

In reply to Ken Fried. I think you get it, Ken. Good job.

By: John Els

John Els — Wed, 04 Dec 2013 23:09:05 +0000

In reply to Ken Fried. Wow, Ken. Excellent writing! I love how you created a picture in my mind :-)